Mandy's Musings

Mandy's Musings

Thursday, 21 October 2010

Aphrodite

I once read that an ‘upwelling’ was an oceanographic term describing the movement of nutrients to the surface of the water.
This phenomenon brings shoals of fish in huge numbers to feast on the bounty.

I was witnessing the human equivalent.

Her tanned body slipped from the pool.

Rivulets silver in the moonlight trickled from golden hair to breasts and hips - a liquid accentuation of curves.

A feeding frenzy of would be suitors offered towels, champagne and adoration.

She declined. I had her sole attention, her hand and her marriage vows.

They snapped their jaws and hunted elsewhere.

18 comments:

  1. And how upset they must have been if they saw what I saw with your description. I love the way you compare the suitors to a frenzied mass of hungry fish. Short and very sweet.

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  2. Nice comparison and great images. Well done!

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  3. Very nice and so laser-like veracity.

    Marc Nash

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  4. Love the imagery in this, it's vivid, and great comparison drawn between fish and human behaviour. You breathed a lot of life into your 100 words. Great story!

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  5. Another lovely short Mandy, flyingscribbler beat me to applauding the comparison. Well done. :)

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  6. Beautiful! I absolutely love the imagery in this piece.

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  7. Thanks to everyone for all the lovely comments - much appreciated.

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  8. What cute kitties! I loved the story, too, especially the smugness of your narrator at the end.

    CD

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  9. Great analogy, very evocative. Love seeing what can be done in 100 words as well, well done!

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  10. Great comparison. Just goes to show that humans are still animals in every sense of the word.

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  11. I'm with everyone else here - such powerdul imagery. I really enjoyed it!

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  12. I second what everyone else has already said. It was fantastic.

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  13. I have to be a copycat and agree with everyone. The imagery is fantastic. The last line, especially, was excellent--really put a topper on this tale. Good story!

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  14. Love this, very short and snappy! Great analogy as well. Well done.

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  15. With an upwell like that he'd best not be resting on his vows and laurels because there are so many other fish in the sea!

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  16. That was a cute, horny suitors knocked away by an ocean of marriage. Suckers!

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  17. Fantastic imagery. :) It's such a wonderful feeling when the others are left behind without a second glance and you get to go home with the prize... because it's yours to begin with.

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